Do you think I put in enough emotions and faces and stuff in the dialogue bits?

Hmm, I'm probably not the best person to ask as I tend to write the same way: lots of dialogue, less in the way of description. I definitely had a strong sense of people's emotions and so on; anyway, I tend to supply that myself and find too much description intrudes on how I'm imagining the scene.


BTW, was it you that said s/he didn't like the Cordelia + Gregor part as well as Aral + Gregor?

Not me, I adored them both.